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Hello i wanted to tell you before hand that this songfic will have a lot of religious views in it, i recommend that you read all of the description first and listen to the song before hand. Thank you and i hope you enjoy this dark story. p.s. i cut out some of the lyrics to fit the story better.
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-Used to be afraid
Of the dark, of the dark, of the dark, of the dark
Those in the light know we die
In the dark, in the dark, in the dark, in the dark-


Why was this happening? You were a good girl! The good little Christian who always tried to be nice and do what was asked of her. Why were you now in this cold, pitch black dungeon? This wasn't right! It shouldn't be happening!

But it was.

-There's only artificial light here
My flaws hide well here
I used to be afraid of cluttered noises
Now I'm afraid of silence-


You could hear the dripping of a water pipe over head, yet could see nothing. Who had done this to you? Antonio. You had once loved that name and it's owner but not after this. It had been a normal day when you had shown up at his house.

He had seemed slightly off but you ignored the nagging feeling inside you telling you to run. You should have listened. Your boyfriend had thrown you into a cellar you didn't know he had and sneered at you.

"Time to face your sins _____." You didn't know why he had done this. He had been such a sweet Christian man when you met him, and you had quickly fallen for his charms. Now you were in his basement, freezing to death.

Time to face your sins. Those words would repeat themselves in your head over and over. What did he mean? What sin was he talking about? Of course you made mistakes like everyone else, you were no one special, but you always asked forgiveness and knew it was given to you by the only one who mattered.

Your only conclusion was that Antonio had cracked, gone insane. You couldn't tell how long you had been down here. With no light time seemed to cease and you were left with only silence and yourself.

That was a terrifying thing, being alone with yourself. You start to realize just who you really are, and it's not a good thing that you are. The silence itself is suffocating. You remembered to the time before you were in the darkness.

You had always enjoyed some peace and quiet, you hadn't been one for noise. Now you would love nothing more than the sound of another car horn or that annoying song on the radio.

-Fill this space
Idle words-


There was no one to talk to other than yourself. And often you did just that. Once again the silence became excruciating. You crawled over to the wall and started to drum on it with your fingers, any noise, and began to ramble on.  

You reminded yourself of the family and friends you had on the outside, going over their appearance and personalities out loud. Sometimes you would sing songs from your church, that always calmed you.

The one thing you always did, almost constantly, was prayed. You prayed to God for your family and friends, that their lives were happy despite your pain, and for forgiveness of your sins.

Even down here where there was no one you still sinned, you would curse God for doing this to you and become angry. You knew this was useless and it only seemed to make you hollow. You knew there was a reason to this pain.

Pain made you grow, and it was true. Without society to get in the way you grew closer to your Lord and continued to trust.

Because trust is all you had.

-I'm scared to death of light and silence
Jesus kill me inside this
Raise me up to live again
Like you did, like you did-


Another day had passed and once again food had shown up while you slept.You whispered grace and dug into the scraps. It wasn't enough to satisfy the gnawing in your stomach. You knew that gnawing would go numb soon, it always did.

Footsteps outside your door brought your head up. A small light peeked through the cracks. Your heart races and you crawled to the back of your cell. The light scared you now after so much darkness.

What was in the light? It was supposed to symbolize good right? Then why did you feel such fear in the pit of your half full stomach? The jiggle of keys made you gulp. You hadn't seen your captor since you had been thrown in here.

The sliver of light increased as the door opened and then closed. You shielded your eyes from the burning rays. It was only a flashlight. Only artificial, with a cruel man behind it.

"Hola chica. Have you repented?"
"What do you want? Why am i hear?"
"Because you've been a naughty girl _____."
"What did i do?"
"You tease me with that body of yours."

You blanched. He was insane, his sick twisted mind had conjured up something bad.
"Fusosososos" That laugh had once been cute but now it chilled you to the bone. You shuttered and tears streaked your cheeks.

Antonio jumped at you.

You tried to focus on happy thoughts as he used you. You tried to ignore the pain he caused and the words he was growling. You shut your eyes as the tears continued, and you prayed for this to stop.

Your body became numb and you could no longer feel anything. You recited scripture in your head until the vile man was done and had left. You sighed and rolled over onto your stomach.

-Now I am mute despite myself
All of them are gone
The silence overtakes me
The idle words forsake me
And I am left to face me-


You couldn't speak you was to ashamed. You knew it wasn't your fault and that you couldn't have fought back in your condition. No one was left and the silence was back, worse than before. Even your brain seemed numb and quiet.

You couldn't accept this new reality that your innocence was gone, taken from you. You had been hoping to stay a virgin until you were married, you had once imagined marrying Antonio.

The tears began to flow once more and you once again prayed.

-I'm held accountable
For every idle word
Curse the idle words-


You recalled all of the bad things you had said and done in your life and cried over the pain you had caused people. You now understood pain, much more than before. You could feel the pain you had caused others.

You felt dirty. You wept and prayed for forgiveness. A strange calm overtook your bruised body and you drifted off into a dreamless sleep. It was the best gift you could have ben given at the time.

-I'm scared to death of light and silence
Jesus kill me inside this
Raise me up to live again
Like you did, like you did-


When you awoke Antonio was looming over you. You whimpered but he just smiled, the smile of a demon.
"Hola, ready for a repeat?"

When he had once again left you prayed for the thing you had been avoiding.
"God please just let me die. I want to be with you and away from all this pain. I know i wont be able to cope with the real world anymore. Please."

-Glory shows up
Exposes us
I'm naked here
Forsaken here
By the dark
By the dark
DAMN THE DARK!-


You felt a warm presence against your face and smiled for the first time in ages. You knew no one would ever find you here that your family would mourn you. But you also knew they would heal.

And so would you. Your cloths were gone but you didn't feel cold you suddenly started to hate this darkness. You were meant to live in the light! It scared you but you knew it was where you belonged.

You knew you weren't good enough, you never could be, yet He had accepted you none the less.

You felt peace.

-I'm scared to death of light and silence
Jesus kill me inside this
Raise me up to live again
Like you did, like you did-


You felt the warmth grow and spread around your hurt body. A dim light started to shine in the distance. You stood onto your wobbly feet and trudged toward the glow. It grew as tears of happiness streamed down your face.

The wounds on your body started to vanish and a white robe appeared in their place. You stopped and breathed your last words to the cursed Earth.
"Thank you Jesus," As you ran into His open arms.

The darkness was gone.

You were home.
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i love this song and wanted to see if i could write a Christian reader insert with it. some of the lyrics made it difficult but i think i pulled it off. What do you think?

Even if you're not Christian, like me, i hope you still enjoyed the story. This isn't really how i interpret the song, the way the song hits me is completely different, so don't be offended if this isn't how you see the song.

This song and it's band is fantastic and is a good example that not all Christian music is hymns

Please don't leave rude comments (i know this could be a story that would start some deep conversations I've seen it before) If you ever want to talk to me about my beliefs message me in a note.

Hetalia: :iconhimaruyaplz:
Story: me
Song: Flyleaf [link]
picture: no me
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~JessiE-A Apr 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow. This is a different fic. I like. I like it a Lot! You managed to show a different side of Spain/Hetalia, yet keep/show your beliefs! Good Job!
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~bubblesvx1100531 Apr 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you~
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~JessiE-A Apr 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
you deserve it!
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~Blazing-pancakes Mar 28, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I have to say, I just read the beginning lyrics and I could already tell it was In the Dark by my favorite band Flyleaf! Thank you very much for taking your time in making this story, I loved it!
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this was nice to read. i havent seen any Christian reader inserts on here before and it was nice to finally find one. I enjoyed it alot. :)
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~bubblesvx1100531 Feb 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you
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:iconthornswish2012:
youre welcome!
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This story was really sad but I loved the ending. I always think that if I was ever in that kind of situation I would do the same thing that she did.
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~bubblesvx1100531 Dec 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
as would i
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:iconreninverno:
This is really beautiful. The ending made my cry a little. Poor reader...
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